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Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

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Women
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 rarely occupy managerial
posts
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 in most workplaces even though they comprise more than half of the working population in developed nations.
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 a rule to reserve some of the positions for females might seem to solve the issue, I believe that men and
women
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 should be allowed to compete equally for the
posts
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 in order to abolish
gender
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 equality. Society has been male-dominated for ages and
this
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 continues into the modern world. A law to allocate a few high-level
posts
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 for females does seem logical but, it does not solve the bigger issue of
gender
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 equality.
Women
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, now, will not have an incentive to work harder as they already have a
post
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 ready for them even if other men actually deserve it. So, eventually, people who are worthy of the
post
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 are overlooked.
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, a woman who acquires
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 a position will not be taken seriously because of the rules in the company.
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, studies say
women
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 in managerial
posts
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 are less likely to be invited to private dinner parties because the majority dismiss them because of their
gender
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. I think no one should be granted the position right away irrespective of their skills as
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 will dilute the strength of the company.
Women
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 should
also
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 be considered by the hiring committee and both genders must be given an equal chance to compete for the
post
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.
This
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 will give an incentive for everyone to work harder. The
posts
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 will eventually be filled only by people who are worthy of it and not by
gender
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.
This
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 will
also
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 attempt to solve the issue of
gender
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 equality in society and
women
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 will not be wrongly objectified.
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, it has been reported that most companies all over the world are now allocating managerial positions to worthy people irrespective of
gender
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. In conclusion, females should not be considered in any way special
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 hiring for high-level positions and all
gender
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 classes must be given an equal opportunity to prove their worthiness of the
post
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.
This
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 will lead to a society
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 just and fair to all its members.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender diversity
  • Affirmative action
  • Meritocracy
  • Quotas
  • Glass ceiling
  • Legal enforcement
  • Tokenism
  • Voluntary measures
  • Career progression
  • Representation
  • Workforce parity
  • Backlash
  • Historical imbalances
  • Corporate governance
  • Inclusive practices
  • Boardroom dynamics
  • Gender norms
  • Unconscious bias
  • Regulatory frameworks
  • Corporate ladder
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