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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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These
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 pie charts show the statistics of the
students
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 of the UK in a specific university who were able to speak in
English
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 and were multilingual as well in the
year
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years
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of
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apply
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2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, Spanish was the most spoken
always
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language ever
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.
French occupied
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French-occupied
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 a good place. A
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 proportion of
students
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 were unable to talk in other
languages
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 except
English
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 but the rate
had been
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declined later in 2010. In 2010, Spanish
were
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was
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 spoken by 30%
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students
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of students
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. Only 10% of
students
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 could speak
in
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apply
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German and 15% French. 10% of
students
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 were able to speak two other
languages
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 out of
this
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 list.
Besides
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, 15%
has
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have
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 been shown as another language speakers.
On
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In
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the
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apply
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contrast, 20% of
students
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 could speak in
English
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 only. Afterward, In 2010 the sums were changed dramatically. Only 10%
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students
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of students
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 were unable to speak other
languages
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 than
English
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. The rate for Spanish, Two other
languages
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 and Another language faced a rise and stood at 35%, 15% and 20%.
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, the statistics for French fell and stood at 10%. The percentage for
German
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Germans
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 was
same
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the same
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 in 2010 as
2000
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in 2000
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, english, languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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