The line chart illustrates the labour force employment in five economic sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010 in USA. These five economic sectors include industrial sector, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting, technical sector, and other services.

The line chart illustrates the labour force employment in five economic sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010 in USA. These five economic sectors include industrial sector, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting, technical sector, and other services.
The line chart shows the USA workforce structure in 5 groups between 1930 and 2010,
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as
industrial
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the industrial
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sector, sales and office,
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apply
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etc. The numbers are given in
percent
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per cent
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(%), briefly Farming, fishing and foresting started with the largest
employees
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number of employees
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until
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in
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1990 and dropped to the lowest
employees
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number of employees
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in 2010.
It is clear that
old-economy jobs like Farming, fishing and foresting trended to
decrese
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decrease
over the period
with
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nearly 79% in 1930 to around 1% in 2010.
Whereas
, new-economy jobs
such
as Industrial, Technical,
Sale
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Sales
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and office trended to increase constantly from 1970 to 2010 which was around 10 to
aproximately
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approximately
38, 35, and 20 respectively. All in all, the old-economy works have a
hugh
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huge
impact
in
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on
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the labor
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labor
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labour
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force market from the
economy
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economic
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disruption
espeacially
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especially
from 1970 to 1990.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • labour force employment
  • economic sectors
  • industrial sector
  • sales and office
  • farming and fishing and foresting
  • technical sector
  • other services
  • general trend
  • consistent rises or falls
  • dramatically declined
  • rural economies
  • shifts in labor demand
  • industrial boom
  • recessions
  • outsourcing trends
  • post-World War II
  • digital age
  • consumer-driven economy
  • socio-economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • broad socio-economic trends
  • globalization
  • consumer habits
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