the bar chart shows the percentage of males and females aged 18-20 in a city who participated in a various activities in ine month in 2015.

the bar chart shows the percentage of males and females aged 18-20 in a city who participated in a various activities in ine month in 2015.
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The diagrams illustrate the proportion of both
mens
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men's
men
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womens
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women's
women
between
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20
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and 20
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reside
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a city that
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various activities in
month
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the month
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of 2015.
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it can be seen that most
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males prefer football more than the

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