You have visited a store and bought set of china tea cups which later you found broken but store denied to replace it. Write a letter to the manager of the store describing situation. In your letter add following points: •State what problem you had with the purchased item. • Complain about the inability of the sales staff to address the problem. • Describe how you want the store to solve the problem to your satisfaction.

Dear Manager, I am writing
this
to raise a concern about the defective Tea Cup Set which I recently bought from your
shop
.
Last
Monday, I
have
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visited your
shop
namely "Wuhan China Wholesale stores" and found a beautiful cup set with
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a lavendor
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lavendor
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lavender
flower design. When I asked
sales
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the sales
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person to pack that, he
get
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got
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new
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a new
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box from inside and packed the same because that was a sample and display piece . After reaching home, I opened the package with excitement but
shocked
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after seeing the
brocken
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broken
cups and they
are
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inappropriate to use.
Moreover
, the design is different from the
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showpiece
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.
Hence
, please find attached
screenshot
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a screenshot
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for your reference.
Next
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The next
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day, I went to
shop
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the shop
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and
convayed
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conveyed
the same to
staff
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the staff
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and
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showed the
brocken
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broken
cups and requested for exchange. But, they
are
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did
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not at all
caring
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my words and in reverse blamed me for the cause.
Moreover
, one of the staff
member
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shouted at me.
This
kind of
behavior
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will definitely impact your sales. In conclusion, I
felt
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regret
to buy
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buying
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this
item from your
shop
. As
a
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compensation, I am requesting you to pay back my full amount. Please consider
this
request as
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and respond to me at
earliest
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. Yours faithfully, Nancy
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task response
Provide more specific details about the defective cups and the incorrect design.
coherence cohesion
Organize the information in a clearer and more logical manner.
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grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure accuracy.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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