The line chart illustrates the labour force employment in five economic sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010 in USA. These five economic sectors include industrial sector, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting, technical sector, and other services.

The line chart illustrates the labour force employment in five economic sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010 in USA. These five economic sectors include industrial sector, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting, technical sector, and other services.
The line graph shows the
labour
force employment in five sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010. These five are farming and fishing and foresting ,ar technical sector ,sales and office ,industrial and other
servies
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services
. The line graph shows the downfall of farming ,fishing and foresting. The graph shows the increase
of
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in
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labour
employment in other sectors . We would
vitness
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witness
the
gratest
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greatest
downfall of farming , fishing and foresting in the
year
between 1970 and 1980 and
also
in
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from
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1990 to 2000. Technical
labour
force
were
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zero between 1930
to
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and
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1950, by the
year
2010
its
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it was
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more or less near to farming,fishing and foreting
labour
force. Sales and office had ups and downs but
some how
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somehow
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it had managed to touch the 20% in the
year
2010. Other
serviece
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service
services
labour
employement
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employment
had a gradual
increse
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increase
and steady
emloyment
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employment
rate between the
year
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years
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1970 to 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • labour force employment
  • economic sectors
  • industrial sector
  • sales and office
  • farming and fishing and foresting
  • technical sector
  • other services
  • general trend
  • consistent rises or falls
  • dramatically declined
  • rural economies
  • shifts in labor demand
  • industrial boom
  • recessions
  • outsourcing trends
  • post-World War II
  • digital age
  • consumer-driven economy
  • socio-economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • broad socio-economic trends
  • globalization
  • consumer habits
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