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The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portions of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart above illustrates the proportion of males and females eating 5 or more portions of fruit and vegetables per day by
age
group
 in the UK in 2006.
Overall
,
while
 the percentage of people eating 5 or more portions a day in the 55-
64 years old
Correct your spelling
64-year-old
group
 was the highest, the opposite was seen in the 19-
24 years old
Correct your spelling
24-year-old
age
group
. Standing at 75%, the
number
 of people consuming enough fruit and vegetables in the 55-64
group
 was the highest, followed by
65
Correct article usage
the 65
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-74
group
 and 75
group
Change to a plural noun
groups
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 with respectively 57% and 50%. The figure for the 75
age
group
 equals three-forth the
number
 of 55-64
age
group
.
Additionally
, the
number
 of males and females in the 75
age
group
equaled
Change the spelling
equalled
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 each other.
On the other hand
, standing at 50%,
45
Correct article usage
the 45
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-54
age
group
 was the highest, followed by 35-44, 25-34, and 19-24 with respectively 47%, 42% and 30%.
45
Correct article usage
The 45
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-54
age
group
 doubled
19
Change preposition
from 19
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-24 and equaled
four-fifth
Fix the agreement mistake
four-fifths
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25
Change preposition
of 25
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-34.
Additionally
, in the 19-24
age
group
, the
number
 of men and women
equal
Add a missing verb
is equal
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 to each other.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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