The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portions of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart above illustrates the proportion of males and females eating 5 or more portions of fruit and vegetables per day by
age
group
in the UK in 2006.
Overall
,
while
the percentage of people eating 5 or more portions a day in the 55-
64 years old
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64-year-old
group
was the highest, the opposite was seen in the 19-
24 years old
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24-year-old
age
group
. Standing at 75%, the
number
of people consuming enough fruit and vegetables in the 55-64
group
was the highest, followed by
65
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the 65
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-74
group
and 75
group
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groups
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with respectively 57% and 50%. The figure for the 75
age
group
equals three-forth the
number
of 55-64
age
group
.
Additionally
, the
number
of males and females in the 75
age
group
equaled
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equalled
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each other.
On the other hand
, standing at 50%,
45
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the 45
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-54
age
group
was the highest, followed by 35-44, 25-34, and 19-24 with respectively 47%, 42% and 30%.
45
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The 45
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-54
age
group
doubled
19
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from 19
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-24 and equaled
four-fifth
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four-fifths
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25
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of 25
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-34.
Additionally
, in the 19-24
age
group
, the
number
of men and women
equal
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is equal
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to each other.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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