The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graph indicates the population in different
age
groups who intake five or more parts of fruits
and vegetables
, as recommended by World
Health Organization, in the UK, in 2006.
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the World
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, woman
in the UK consumed more Fix the agreement mistake
women
fruits
and vegetables
than man
, in which the Fix the agreement mistake
men
middle
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middle-aged
age
residents accounted for the largest proportion. On the other hand
, only a few young individuals were able to intake the same amount of nutrition.
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fruits
and vegetables
were elderly people, especially those who
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age
group between 55 to 64, accounting with
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percent
of males and 35 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
of females. On top of that, there were many people aged 75 Change the spelling
per cent
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achived
the standard consumption of Correct your spelling
achieved
fruits
and vegetables
, the number of man
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men
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a woman
the woman
woman
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women
percent
.
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On the other hand
, young adults ate the least of fruits
and vegetables
, only 15 percent
of young adults who in the Change the spelling
per cent
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between 19 to 24 ate five or more parts of Replace the word
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fruits
and vegetables
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