The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

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The graph indicates the population in different
age
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groups who intake five or more parts of
fruits
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and
vegetables
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, as recommended by
World
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the World

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Health Organization, in the UK, in 2006.
Overall
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,
woman
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women

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in the UK consumed more
fruits
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and
vegetables
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than
man
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men

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, in which the
middle
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middle-aged

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age
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residents accounted for the largest proportion.
On the other hand
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, only a few young individuals were able to intake the same amount of nutrition. In 2006, most of
people
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the people

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in the UK who
consume
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consumed

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five or more portions of
fruits
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and
vegetables
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were elderly people, especially those
who
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apply

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in the
age
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group between 55 to 64, accounting
with
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for

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32
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percent
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per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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of males and 35
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percent
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per cent

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of females. On top of that, there were many people aged 75
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who achived
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who achived

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achived
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achieved
the standard consumption of
fruits
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and
vegetables
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, the number of
man
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men

The singular countable noun man follows the quantifier number, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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were equal
as
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to

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a woman
the woman
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a woman
the woman

The noun phrase woman seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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woman
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women
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at 25
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percent
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per cent

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.
On the other hand
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, young adults ate the least of
fruits
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and
vegetables
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, only 15
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percent
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per cent

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of young adults who in the
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age
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aged

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between 19 to 24 ate five or more parts of
fruits
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and
vegetables
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

,
in
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apply

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which girls
were
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apply

The verb were appears to be unnecessary here.

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slightly more than boys.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, fruits, vegetables, percent with synonyms.
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