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The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts
down
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apply
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displays
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display
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 the British
student's proportions
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students
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 who had
responsibility
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a responsibility
the responsibility
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 to speak foreign languages
in addition
 to English at one university in England, in 2000 and 2010. In ten years the
British
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number of British
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 student's number has changed
for
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by
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 50%. In 2010
people
 who speak
spanish
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Spanish
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 has grown
for
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by
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 5%. The amount of
people
 who
knows
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know
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 another language has grown
for
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by
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 5%, and
number
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a number
the number
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 of
people
 who
knows
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know
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 only English has dropped
for
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by
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 10% which
is means
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means
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 the
interesting
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interest
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of
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in
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 learning
new
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a new
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 language increased.
Overall
,the
percent
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percentage
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 of
people
 who learned a new language or know went up which is good,
beacuse
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because
 every year we are developing.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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