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The line chart below shows the percentage of renewable energy production in Germany from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line chart below shows the percentage of renewable energy production in Germany from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line chart illustrates the
Germans
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German's
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 usage in renewable energy
production
 with percentages as its unit between 2000 and 2020. Hydroelectric power is
highest
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the highest
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production
while
wind
 is the lowest. Hydroelectric power and
wood
 witnessed it highest fluctuations after 1970. Both
biofuels
 and
wind
has
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have
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 it increasing moment
right
 after the
year
 2000.
Overall
, the total
production
 hand it fluctuations but remain high. As both hydroelectric and
wood
 show
its
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obvious fluctuations, hydroelectric is the highest in demand of
production
 even
it
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though it
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 managed to
surpassed
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surpass
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wood
 in
right
 before the
year
 1960 with just below 2%.
This
 steadily increased with its highest peak just after 1970 until it started to fluctuate.
Same
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The same
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 goes with
wood
, it was the highest for a very short period of time
an
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and
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 continued to
remained
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remain
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 steady until after the
year
 1980
where
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when
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 it reached just above 2% but still below the
production
 of hydroelectric power. For once
it
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apply
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wood
 did
surpassed
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surpass
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 hydroelectric
right
 around 1990 but
short
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shortly
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 after it
face
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faced
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 a small plunge.
Biofuels
 and
wind
 only
exsist
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exist
exists
 after the
year
 1980 and grow steadily. After the
year
 2000, both
have its
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had
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 major
increased
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increases
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 in
production
right
 below 2% with
biofuels
 still taking the lead. In total, renewable energy
production
 has
it major
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significantly
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 increased with the
supporting
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support
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 of
biofuels
 and
wind
right
 after 1980.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, wind, wood, biofuels, right, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 4 times.
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