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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The pie chart provides the data about the
students
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learing
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learning
learn
 various
languages
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besides
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 English. In 2000 there were 30 per
cent
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 of the
students
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 learnt Spanish.
However
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,
this
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 figure increased in 2010. The number of people who learn no other
languages
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 decreased rapidly. To start with, in 2000, there were 20 per
cent
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 of
students
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 who did not speak any other
languages
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.
One fifth
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One-fifth
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 decided to learn German or two other
languages
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 at the same time. 15 per
cent
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 knew the English language only,
while
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 the most popular one was Spanish. As
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 2010, the number of those who learnt Spanish rose significantly from 30 to 35 per
cent
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. The figure of the
students
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knew
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who knew
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 no other language was twice less than in the previous 10 years. The proportion of
French speaking
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French-speaking
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 public declined rapidly.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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