The bar chart below shows the percentage ot Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture denotes the proportion of
Australian
who did daily physical exercise based on gender and separated into different Fix the agreement mistake
Australians
age
brackets throughout 2010. Generally, female
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females
was
dominant Correct subject-verb agreement
were
of
religiously doing physical activity Change preposition
in
except
the youngest Add the preposition
except for
age
brackets. The highest discrepancy of
gender happened Change preposition
in
in
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between
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the age
age
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ages
35
to 44.
Regarding Change preposition
of 35
the
Australian Women, almost Correct article usage
apply
age
group surpassed Men's numbers, except Correct determiner usage
every age
age
15 to 24 (47,7%) which was 5% lower Change preposition
for age
the
opposite gender. It seems that Change preposition
than the
age
group 35 to 44 (52,5%), 45 to 54 (53,3%), and 55 to 64 (53%) were considered as the most active of exercising their body. Additionally
, the rest of the categories only scored below 48%.
Otherwise
, the young male was relatively consistent to do work
out at 52,8%. The majority Wrong verb form
working
age
group above 25+ stood at 42 - 47%, except 35 - 44 which scored below 40%.Submitted by websiteonlyforme on
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