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The charts compares the value changes in UK metal industry between 1970 and 2000. While, UK demand and UK production fell over time, the import rose . The second line graph reveals the employment status in UK steel industry. As the graph shows, UK demand in the begin was in the higher line with 200000 in 1970, but it slowly decreased about 180000 in 1980. Then the UK demand rapidly declined approximately 110000 in 1990. Afterward, the demand slightly went down from 1990 to 2000. The UK production at the beginning was around 160000 in 1970. Then the value steadily dropped approximately 9000 from 1970 to 1990. Afterward the value kept unchanged between 1990 and 2000. The import at the beginning was in the bottom line with around 1 in 1970. Then gradually increased to 500000 from 1970 to 1990. Afterward, the import substantially climbed around 700000 in 2000. Regarding working parties status in UK steel industry. In the beginning of year employments were 50000 in 1970. Then slowly fell to 40000 between 1970 and 1980, and considerable plunged to 20000 in 1990. Then the status slightly decreased around 19000 from 1990 to 2000.

The charts compares the value changes in UK metal industry between 1970 and 2000. While, UK demand and UK production fell over time, the import rose . The second line graph reveals the employment status in UK steel industry. As the graph shows, UK demand in the begin was in the higher line with 200000 in 1970, but it slowly decreased about 180000 in 1980. Then the UK demand rapidly declined approximately 110000 in 1990. Afterward, the demand slightly went down from 1990 to 2000. The UK production at the beginning was around 160000 in 1970. Then the value steadily dropped approximately 9000 from 1970 to 1990. Afterward the value kept unchanged between 1990 and 2000. The import at the beginning was in the bottom line with around 1 in 1970. Then gradually increased to 500000 from 1970 to 1990. Afterward, the import substantially climbed around 700000 in 2000. Regarding working parties status in UK steel industry. In the beginning of year employments were 50000 in 1970. Then slowly fell to 40000 between 1970 and 1980, and considerable plunged to 20000 in 1990. Then the status slightly decreased around 19000 from 1990 to 2000.
The charts
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 the value changes in
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UK
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 metal industry between 1970 and 2000.
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UK
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demand
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 and
UK
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 production fell over time, the import rose . The second line graph reveals the employment status in
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UK
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the UK
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 steel industry. As the graph shows,
UK
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demand
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begin
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 was in the higher line with 200000 in 1970, but it slowly decreased
about
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 180000 in 1980.
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UK
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demand
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 rapidly declined
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 110000 in 1990.
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demand
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 slightly went down from 1990 to 2000. The
UK
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 production at the beginning was around 160000 in 1970.
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 the value steadily dropped
approximately
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 9000 from 1970 to 1990.
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Afterward
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 the value kept unchanged between 1990 and 2000. The import at the beginning was in the bottom line with around 1 in 1970.
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 gradually increased to 500000 from 1970 to 1990.
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, the import substantially climbed
around
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 700000 in 2000. Regarding working
parties
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 status in
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UK
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the UK
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 steel industry.
In
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 the beginning of
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year
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year,
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employments
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employment
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were
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 50000 in 1970.
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 slowly fell to 40000 between 1970 and 1980, and
considerable
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 plunged to 20000 in 1990.
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 the status slightly decreased around 19000 from 1990 to 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, demand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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