The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of males and females
eat
Correct pronoun usage
who eat

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

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five or more
fruit
Fix the agreement mistake
fruits

It seems that fruit may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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and vegetables per day in the United Kingdom by
age
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

group.
Overall
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, it can be seen from the bar chart that
both
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

male
Fix the agreement mistake
males

It seems that male may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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and
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females

It seems that female may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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from 55 to 64
years
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

old
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are

It seems that the verb is does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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the highest.
While
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

the
Remove the article
apply

It is unlikely that your sentence needs the article the before both. Consider deleting the article.

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both
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

male
Fix the agreement mistake
males

It seems that male may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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and
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females

It seems that female may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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in 19-24
years
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

old
is
Verb problem
have

There may be a verb use issue here.

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the lowest
percentages
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. It is apparent that the
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

percentages
Fix the agreement mistake
percentage

It seems that percentages may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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of
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

age
Correct article usage
the age

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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group in male
is
Change the verb form
are

The singular verb is does not appear to agree with the plural subject the percentages of age group in male. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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lower than
Change preposition
in female
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female
Fix the agreement mistake
females

It seems that female may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. The number of
female
Change to a plural noun
females

The singular countable noun female follows the quantifier number, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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is higher than
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males

It seems that male may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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approximately 2, 3, 2, 5, 2 and 2
percentages
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

in 19 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 44, 45 to 54, 55 to 64 and 65 to 74, respectively in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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year 2006.
However
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, the
percentages
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

of
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

age
Correct article usage
the age

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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group
in
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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75
years
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

old
was still remained
Change to the active voice
still remained
remained

It appears you have attempted to use the intransitive verb remained in a passive voice construction. Consider writing the sentence in the active voice.

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at 25
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

percentages
Replace the word
per cent

The word percentages doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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in
both
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

male
Fix the agreement mistake
males

It seems that male may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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and
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females

It seems that female may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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in 2006.
To conclude
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, the
percentages
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

of fruit and vegetables
were
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb were appears to be unnecessary here.

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consumed five
of
Correct your spelling
or

The word of doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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more
portion
Fix the agreement mistake
portions

It seems that portion may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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in every
age
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, the
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

percentages
Fix the agreement mistake
percentage

It seems that percentages may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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of
Add an article
the female
a female
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female
Fix the agreement mistake
females

It seems that female may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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is higher than
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males

It seems that male may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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.
In contrast
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, the only
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

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of
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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different
Replace the word
difference

The word different doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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from the other is
75
Correct word choice
that 75

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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years
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

old still
remain
Correct subject-verb agreement
remains

It seems that the verb remain does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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25
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

percentages
Replace the word
per cent

The word percentages doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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of
both
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

male
Fix the agreement mistake
males

It seems that male may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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and
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females

It seems that female may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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