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The line graph below illustrates the annual visitors spend for visitors to New Zealand from Australia, USA, UK, Japan and china for the years 1996 to 2014.

The line graph below illustrates the annual visitors spend for visitors to New Zealand from Australia, USA, UK, Japan and china for the years 1996 to 2014.
#line #visitors #zealand #australia #usa #uk #japan #china #years
The line graph below illustrates the annual
visitors spend
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spending
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 for
visitors
 to New
Zealand
 from
Australia
,
USA
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the USA
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,
UK
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the UK
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, Japan and
china
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China
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 for the years 1996 to 2014. As can be seen from the graph, the amount of annual
visitors
spend
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spent
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 increased
from
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in
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 all five countries but rose the most dramatically in
Australia
. The period between 1996 and 2006 saw a sharp growth and in 2008 we can see a little decrease. In 1996
China
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Chinese
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visitor
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visitors
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spend
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spent
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a
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the
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 least amount of money in New
Zealand
,
while
Australia
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Australian
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 and
Japan
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Japanese
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visitors
 spent about as much as each other.
However
, by 2008,
in
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apply
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these two countries had
decrease
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a decrease
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 in spending money in New
Zealand
 and considerably more money
spend
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spent
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visitors
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on visitors
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 from
UK
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the UK
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 and
USA
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the USA
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.
overall
, during
this
 eight-year period,
Australia
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Australian
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visitors
 remained the biggest spenders in New
Zealand
, with all four countries spending much less.
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