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The line graph below illustrates the annual visitors spend for visitors to New Zealand from Australia, USA, UK, Japan and china for the years 1996 to 2014.

The line graph below illustrates the annual visitors spend for visitors to New Zealand from Australia, USA, UK, Japan and china for the years 1996 to 2014.
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The line graph below illustrates the annual
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visitors spend
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 for
visitors
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 to New
Zealand
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 from
Australia
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,
USA
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the USA
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,
UK
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, Japan and
china
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 for the years 1996 to 2014. As can be seen from the graph, the amount of annual
visitors
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spend
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 increased
from
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 all five countries but rose the most dramatically in
Australia
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. The period between 1996 and 2006 saw a sharp growth and in 2008 we can see a little decrease. In 1996
China
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Chinese
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visitor
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visitors
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spend
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a
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 least amount of money in New
Zealand
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,
while
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Australia
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Australian
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 and
Japan
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Japanese
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visitors
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 spent about as much as each other.
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, by 2008,
in
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these two countries had
decrease
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 in spending money in New
Zealand
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 and considerably more money
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visitors
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on visitors
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 from
UK
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the UK
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 and
USA
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the USA
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.
overall
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, during
this
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 eight-year period,
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Australia
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Australian
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visitors
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 remained the biggest spenders in New
Zealand
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, with all four countries spending much less.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, zealand, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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