You recently purchased an item from a local store, but you are not satisfies with your purchase. Write a letter to the manager of the store. In your letter •Describe the item you bought and why you need it •explain why you are not happy with it •say what you would like the manager to do Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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letter to bring to your notice about defective piece, which
was deliver
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to me
on
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apply
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last
Thursday 26th May 2023. I
had
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purchased
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an amazon
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amazon kindle
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Amazon Kindle
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on Thursday from your departmental store, but it was not working as per expectation. The gadget is used for teaching my children online.
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opening the package, I was
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that it
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not working as per
product
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the product
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booklet. It was
disappointment
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a disappointment
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to work on
defective
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the defective
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piece. After trying 10 times somehow it starts working but performance is below expectation.
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, I would like to exchange the product as it is mentioned in
warranty
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the warranty
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period. The product has
12-month
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a 12-month
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warranty and exchange clause from the date of purchase. For your reference receipt and warranty card
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enclosed with
this
letter. I look forward to your early response and waiting for
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of the matter. Yours faithfully, Jay Michael
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task achievement
Clarify the specific issues with the Kindle in more detail to strengthen your case.
coherence cohesion
Smooth out sentence structure for better flow; consider varying sentence lengths.
task achievement
Provide a specific call to action or a timeline for the desired resolution.
task achievement
You clearly identified the problem and the action you want taken, which fulfils the task requirements.
greeting and closing
The introduction and closing are well-structured and polite.
logical structure
Logical structure with clear paragraphs covering different points.
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