The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The pie charts depict the percentages of British
students
at one university in the UK who had the ability to speak other
languages
besides
English, in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, in 2000, most of the
students
spoke just Spanish and in 2010, it was improved,
while
those
students
who could just speak English decreased in 2010. It can be seen that 30% of
students
spoke Spanish only,
whereas
20% of them did not speak other language. Both groups of
students
with 15% could speak French only and another language. Again two other groups with 10% had the ability to speak two other
languages
and German only.
According to
2010, those student who spoke just Spanish increased by only 5%.
On the other hand
, the French-spoken
group
and that considered a
group
with two other
languages
rose by 5%,
while
the
group
with another language fell by 5%. The German-spoken
group
remained with a constant value. The number of
students
who could not speak other
languages
decreased by 10%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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