The graphs below show the trends in three boys and girls names which are currently in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the trends in three boys and girls names which are currently in the UK. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In the chart above, three
names
of
grils
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girls
and boys were provided. The chart
represent
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the duration between 1925 and 2000. Some
names
become more popular and some are not famous. In the
frist
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first
gragh
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graph
, there are boys
names
, which are Daniel, Oliver, and Alexander. In the year
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of
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1925
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1925,
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the
names
of Daniel and Alexander were close to each other.But,
then
oilver
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silver
became more used the Alexander.
Finaly
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Finally
, in the year of 1975, the
names
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of
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Oliver was not used at all, and the
name
of
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Danial
become
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more popular.
However
, the second chart contains the trends of
girls
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girls'
girl's
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names
. In the year of 1925,
Emily
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Emily's
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name
was the only
used
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one used
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in the UK, and
then
after 50 years it began to
compet
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compete
complete
the the
names
of Isabell and Sophia. Anyway, after 50 years, the
name
of Emily
still
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is still
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the most used
the
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in the
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UK in the
last
century. In conclusion, there are many
trand
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brand
name
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names
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of
grils
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girls
and boys in
UK
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the UK
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, but Daniel and Emily are the most famous
name
during the
last
century. In my opinion, these two
name
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names
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are pretty and nice
names
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words names, name with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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