The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
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world
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the world
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health institution said that
people
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should eat minimum
five
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of five
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fruits per day, diagram illustrates the number of two
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in
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Kingdom with given
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in 2006. We can see from the table that the in given seven different
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female
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females
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ates
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eat
more fruits and vegetables than males, it is noticed that the lowest indicator
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ages
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19-24 with 16% and the highest is from 55 to 64 with 34%. As can be seen from the table
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, with each increase in age, the percentage of
people
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who eat fruits and vegetables becomes larger,
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however
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after 64 aged
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who
eats
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the indicator
deacrease
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decrease
decreased
from 34% to 25%.
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55-64
year
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remained the biggest spenders on fruit and vegetables, with all other
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spending much more on them.
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the
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whose
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who are
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75 years or more only their index by fruit consumption is the same. In the period 2006 saw
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highest growth 35%.
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