The pie charts show the proportion of graduates with 6 different types of qualifications namely: First dagree-Art, First dagree-Science, Master- Art, Master- Science, Ph.D- Art, and Ph.D- Science who worked for the same engineering company between 1980 and 2008.

The pie charts show the proportion of graduates with 6 different types of qualifications namely: First dagree-Art, First dagree-Science, Master- Art, Master- Science, Ph.D- Art, and Ph.D- Science who worked for the same engineering company between 1980 and 2008.
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The
pie
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charts show the proportion of graduates with 6 different types of qualifications namely:
First
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dagree
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degree
-Art,
First
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dagree
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degree
-Science, Master- Art, Master- Science,
Ph
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.D- Art, and
Ph
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.D- Science who worked for the same engineering company between 1980 and 2008.
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, as the two
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charts show, during the previous 28 years, there has been an increase in the number of workers holding
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Ph.D.
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certificates
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in a variety of fields,
while
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the proportion of those holding master's decrees have remained constant. It is clear from the
pie
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chart from 1980 shows that most of the
qualification
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certificates
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are for Master-Science, exactly 29%.
Qualification
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certificates
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are distributed in relation to other qualifications.
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, if the share of the
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certificate
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of the
Ph
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.D-sciences is exactly 25%,
then
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20% of the
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certificate
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in the enterprise is a
First
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dagree-Art
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degree-Art
. The percentage rate of the Master-Art
qualification
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certificate
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is exactly 13%. The
First
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degree-art account accounts for 11% of total sales. There
are
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only 2
percent
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per cent
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of the
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certificate
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, namely the
Ph
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.D-Art. The 2008
pie
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chart shows that the majority of
qualification
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certificates
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are PhD-Science, exactly 30%.
Qualification
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certificates
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are distributed in relation to other qualifications.
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, the share of the Master-Science
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certificate
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was exactly 29%,
while
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12% of the
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certificate
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in the enterprise corresponds to the field of the
First
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degree-Science and art. The percentage of the
First
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degree-art
qualification
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certificate
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is exactly 10%. The
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first degree-Art
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account accounts for 11% of total sales. Only 7% of
qualification
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certificates
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, i.e.,
Ph
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.D-Arts.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in particular, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, first, ph, certificates, qualification, certificate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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