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You have arranged to rent a new apartment, but will not be able to move in immediately due to some personal difficulties. Write a letter to the apartment owner. In your letter • describe the situation • explain why you won't be able to move in right now • say that you would like to move in at a later date.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
the
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 email regarding the new apartment that I rented
last
 week. My name is Nouf and I booked one of your apartments number 87
in
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on
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 the second floor. As I told you before,
that
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I got a new job in Jeddah and I am supposed to move these days. I can say that everything is almost done and ready including my apartment, and the furniture.
Also
, I rented a new car which I am really excited
for
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.
However
, I am facing difficulties in terms of my current job. My
manger
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manager
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 told
my
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me
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 that I am unable to move until I finish working on a project
that is
 highly important.
Therefore
, I find myself in a situation where I am unable to leave my current work
now
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. I believe that the project will take so much time, and I will be busy for the next month.
As a result
, I would like to inform you that I am only able to move to my new place
in
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 the 5th of April. Looking
forwad
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forward
 to hearing from you. Thank you for understanding. Kind regards, NOUF MUT,
Submitted by noufxmut on

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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down some of the paragraphs into smaller sections to improve readability. For instance, you could separate the description of your excitement about moving into a new apartment and the difficulties you are encountering into different paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all sentences contribute to the main idea of each paragraph. Some sentences, while informative, may be better placed in a different section for clarity.
task achievement
Your letter addresses all parts of the task, giving a clear description of the situation, explaining why you can't move in right now, and proposing a new date for moving in.
task achievement
You maintain a suitably polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for addressing an apartment owner.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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