The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
The provided bar chart depicts the rates of
men
and
women
who eat
five
or more
portions
of fruits and vegetables per day in the United Kingdom in 7 different age sections.
Overall
,
women
and
men
who are in their 55-64 make up the vast majority of eating
five
or more
portions
a day.
Women
's percentages in the chart are generally higher than
men
's. For
men
and
women
who are in their 19-24 15% of males eat
five
or more
portions
while
women
's
rate
is more than 15%. 20 percent of
Men
who are in their 25-34 eat
five
or more before approximately 22% with
women
which is as same as
men
who are in their 35 to 44.
Moreover
, 25% of
women
who are in their 35-44 eat fruit and vegetables in
five
or more
portions
. The highest proportion of the whole chart is
women
who are in their 55-64, their
rate
is around 34%
while
in that age
men
's
rate
is just around 32%.
Furthermore
,
men
and
women
who are 75 eat at the same
rate
which is 25%.
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