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The chart below shows the promotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarise and write the information in about 150 words making relevant comparisons

The chart below shows the promotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarise and write the information in about 150 words making relevant comparisons
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The given pie charts compare the ratios of multilingual British college
students
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 in the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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,
while
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 the proportion of bilingual
students
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 increased over time, the figure of the people who can speak German and 3 different language speakers remained
same
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the same
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. In both years, Spanish was the most popular
foreing
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foreign
 language in that particular university in England. Around 1 in third of the
students
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 were able to speak it in 2 verified years. Over a decade,
whereas
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 the percentage of
another
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other
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 language speakers increased by nearly 35%, the decrement
of
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French speaking
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French-speaking
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 pupils ratio was the same. The proportion of trilingual college
studens
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students
 and people who chose to learn only
german
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German
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 remained still
which
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10% for both.
Due to
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 the fall of the ratio of monolingual
students
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 by %10, it is clearly seen that 2 or 3 foreign languages speaking pupils were increased rationally.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratios" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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