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You are the manager of a restaurant that has received a letter of complaint about poor service from a member of your staff. Write a letter of apology to the person who has complained. In your letter, – say how sorry you are that the person has had a poor experience – explain what action has been taken against the staff member – offer a free meal for four people at the restaurant as a gesture of goodwill

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to apologize to the visitors. My
stuffs
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staff
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 are very shy and lazy. They
had
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made
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 a lot of mistakes. Many stuffs started working not
along
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long
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 ago month. They had no experience
for
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in
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 their job. Some
stuffs
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staff
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 had got experience for
job
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the job
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. They taught as
waiter
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a waiter
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. Because of your complaints, I spoke to them rudely. I increased their
works
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 two times.
Although
 I gave more
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, I did not increase their salary. Their work starts at
7.00a.m
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7.00 a.m
 and
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finishes
finish
 at 20.00p.m. I thought they faced many difficulties. Nowadays they have not got important challenges. When It was the 5th anniversary of our restaurant. We will give four or five
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free
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of free
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meal
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. Because we have got any mistakes.
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, We will give you free to fix the error. I look forward to hearing they
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 faithfully John Jacob
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coherence cohesion
Structure your letter more logically. For example, begin with an apology, then explain the actions taken, and finally offer the free meal.
task achievement
Use clearer and more concise language to convey your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a single idea and that these ideas flow logically.
task achievement
You have addressed all the points mentioned in the prompt.
suitable writing tone
You have used a formal tone appropriate for the situation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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