The table illustrates the number of employees and manufacturers in both England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Overall, the number of employees steadily declined, while the number of factories remained relatively stable over the fifty-year period. Looking more closely at the data, in 1851, there were 477,100 employees working in 225 factories, with the majority of workers being male. By 1861, the number of factories had slightly increased to 227, while the number of employees had noticeably decreased, with females making up the majority of the workforce—160,000 female workers compared to 131,780 male workers. In 1871, the number of factories surged dramatically, nearly tripling, though the decline in employee numbers continued. At this point, men became the predominant group among workers. This trend persisted until 1891, when the number of factories decreased from 721 in 1881 to 625. By 1901, with fewer workers overall and a higher proportion of men, the number of factories had dropped to 600, with the total number of employees falling to a low of 61,000. By means a turning point in history: by that time something changed.

The table illustrates the number of employees and manufacturers in both England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

Overall, the number of employees steadily declined, while the number of factories remained relatively stable over the fifty-year period.

Looking more closely at the data, in 1851, there were 477,100 employees working in 225 factories, with the majority of workers being male. By 1861, the number of factories had slightly increased to 227, while the number of employees had noticeably decreased, with females making up the majority of the workforce—160,000 female workers compared to 131,780 male workers. In 1871, the number of factories surged dramatically, nearly tripling, though the decline in employee numbers continued. At this point, men became the predominant group among workers. This trend persisted until 1891, when the number of factories decreased from 721 in 1881 to 625. By 1901, with fewer workers overall and a higher proportion of men, the number of factories had dropped to 600, with the total number of employees falling to a low of 61,000.

By means a turning point in history: by that time something changed.
The table illustrates the
number
of
employees
and manufacturers in both England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
Overall
, the
number
of
employees
steadily declined,
while
the
number
of
factories
remained relatively stable over the fifty-year period. Looking more closely at the data, in 1851, there were 477,100
employees
working in 225
factories
, with the majority of
workers
being male. By 1861, the
number
of
factories
had slightly increased to 227,
while
the
number
of
employees
had noticeably decreased, with females making up the majority of the workforce—160,000 female
workers
compared to 131,780 male
workers
. In 1871, the
number
of
factories
surged dramatically, nearly tripling, though the decline in employee numbers continued. At
this
point, men became the predominant group among
workers
.
This
trend persisted until 1891
,
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when the
number
of
factories
decreased from 721 in 1881 to 625. By 1901, with fewer
workers
overall
and a higher proportion of men, the
number
of
factories
had dropped to 600, with the total
number
of
employees
falling to a low of 61,000. By means
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turning point in history: by that time something changed.
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