The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
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This
bar chart depicts a comparison between
two
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gender
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genders
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in types of consumption
five
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of five
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or more portions of fruit and vegetables. It is measured by numbers in percentages in 2006.
Overall
,
as
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apply
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it can be clearly seen that females
at
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aged
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age
55 to 64
yeasr
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years
year
were the greatest
in
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at
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using fruit and vegetables.
By contrast
, males
at
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aged
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age
19 to 24 years were the lowest over
this
year.
According to
the given data in the following graph,
women
used 35% of food at
age
55-64. they were higher than
men
by 5%.
Whereas
,
men
only consumed 15% of meals
at
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the younger generation. They were lesser than
women
by only 1% at
age
19- 24.
However
, both genders over 70 shared
a
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same percentage which was 25%.
On the other hand
, both
men
and
women
had nearly a similar percentage in the number of food at
age
25 to 44.
Moreover
,
women
were higher than
men
by 3% approximately in
this
period of
age
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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