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The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 200 words.

The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 200 words.
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The aim of
this
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 report is to present the information in the
pie
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chart
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 about the proportions of
graduates
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 from Brighton
University
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 in 2019 entering different employment
sectors
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. The data in
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pie
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chart
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 is divided into 10 different aspects: 4 big ones and 6 smaller ones. The first big
one
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 is the
percentage
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 of
graduates
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 going to the
education
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sector
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; the second
one
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 is the
percentage
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 of
graduates
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 going to the politics and government
sector
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; the third
one
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 is the
percentage
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 of
graduates
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 going to the manufacturing industry
sector
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; and the
last
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one
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 is the
percentage
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 of
graduates
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 going to the
service
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 industries
sector
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.
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, it can be seen that the biggest and most popular employment
sector
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 at Brighton
University
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 in 2019 was the
service
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industries
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industry
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, taking up
one
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-third of the
pie
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chart
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space
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.
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The other
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 2
sectors
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, both being close to 15%, are
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education
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the education
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 and manufacturing industry, taking a total of
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30%
pie
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chart
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space
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. The least popular of the 4 biggest
sectors
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 in
university
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 is politics and government, which is close to
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the two
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 previously mentioned
sectors
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, coming close to 12%. The 6 smaller pieces of
pie
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chart
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 take up about 1/4 of the
pie
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chart
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space
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. The biggest
one
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 of them is transportation and warehousing, which is two times lower than the
education
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sector
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,
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 the lowest is the
sport
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sector
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, taking up 1 / 1000 of the
pie
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chart
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space
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! There are
also
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 science & technology, civil
service
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 and charity
sectors
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, which combined take up
one
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-eighth of the
pie
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chart
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space
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. In conclusion, the data highlights the
service
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 industries as the most prominent employment
sector
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 for Brighton
University
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graduates
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 in 2019, with
education
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 and manufacturing following closely. The remaining
sectors
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,
while
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 smaller in proportion, demonstrate the diverse range of career paths pursued by the
graduates
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, chart, graduates, university, sectors, one, percentage, education, sector, service, space with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • sector
  • employment
  • graduate
  • university
  • compare
  • contrast
  • notable
  • trend
  • pattern
  • significant
  • specialist industry
  • general sector
  • historical data
  • implied
  • percent
  • percentage
  • sizeable
  • demonstrate
  • highlight
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