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Question The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of both genders who are using five or more portions of fruit and vegetables each day divided into different groups depending on their ages (based in
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Overall
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 , females' expenditure was more than the males, but boys And girls who are 75 years old have the same percentage. In the group from 19-24 , boys and girls have a slight difference , where gentlemen were 15% and females were just over 15% , the proportion of people started growing up in
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steadily way from 25 to 54.
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 , by the age of 55-64, both genders were reaching the highest amount of consuming portion of fruit and vegetables ,
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 it starts to decrease significantly until 25% each of them.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced diet
  • fruit and vegetable intake
  • recommendations
  • percentage
  • males
  • females
  • age group
  • consumption
  • comparison
  • analyze
  • increase
  • intake
  • statistics
  • data
  • trend
  • healthy lifestyle
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