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The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrates
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illustrate
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 what both
gender
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genders
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do
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on
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in
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 their free time in the UK in 2008.
It is clear that
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 women spend
alot
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a lot
 of time in housework activities.
Womens
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most
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apply
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spent
time
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more time
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on
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apply
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cooking and washing 45 times
than
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more than
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 men .
While
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 the least chore they do is repair and the average was less than 20
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minute
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minutes
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 per
day
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 . Reading books was similar with men with
1
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1-minute
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minute
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 difference per
day
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.
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While
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For
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 men their less
prefer
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preferred
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 was spots and clothing washing
were
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was
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 approximately 15
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minute
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minutes
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 per
day
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 .
Linking Words
However
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However,
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 statistics
shows
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show
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 that they
more
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are more
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 into spending their
day
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on
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apply
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watching TV, radio,
video
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and video
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with
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apply
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one hundred and
thirty seven
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thirty-seven
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minute
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minutes
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. To summarize, the most significant
diffrence
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difference
 average was in housework
specially
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 in cooking and washing . Ang the
similiraties
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similarities
 were with reading books.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minute, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparison
  • Household activities
  • Leisure activities
  • Average
  • Significantly more/less
  • Markedly more/less
  • Striking difference
  • Counterparts
  • Societal norms
  • Differing interests
  • Dedicated time
  • Household tasks
  • Maintenance
  • Repairs
  • Pursuits
  • Socializing
  • Gender divide
  • Traditional roles
  • Allocation of time
  • Reflects
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