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The bar charts illustrate the activities that UK graduate and postgraduate student did instead of full-time work after learing college in 2008. Overall, the proportion between both types of the student is similar. Most of them studied further, while the rest of them worked voluntaraly. The most often picked option for students is to continue their studyings with the estimate amount of 29665 graduates and 2725 postgraduates. Second in popularity is a part-time work counting 17735 graduates while only 2535 postgraduates.

The bar charts illustrate the activities that UK graduate and postgraduate student did instead of full-time work after learing college in 2008. Overall, the proportion between both types of the student is similar. Most of them studied further, while the rest of them worked voluntaraly. The most often picked option for students is to continue their studyings with the estimate amount of 29665 graduates and 2725 postgraduates. Second in popularity is a part-time work counting 17735 graduates while only 2535 postgraduates.
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The bar charts provide key information about the activities that both UK
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postgraduates
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graduates
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 are engaging in. The units are measured in the number of
students
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.
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, it is clear from the charts that the majority of
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 and postgraduates are completing their studies.
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, the minority of UK
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postgraduates
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graduates
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 are engaging in
part time
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 jobs in
comparision
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comparison
 to the graduated
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According to
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 what is shown from the charts, roughly 30,000
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 are continuing their higher degrees
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 3500 only are having
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voluntary
 experience. Around 18000
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are having
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part time
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 jobs,
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however
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 roughly 16000
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 are unemployed. In terms of postgraduates, the minority of them are having
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voluntary
 work,
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 the majority are completing their studies. Approximately 2500
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are having
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have
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part-time
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part time
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part-time
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 jobs
while
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 there are about 1600 unemployed
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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