The graphs below show the percentage of graduates that got full-time jobs after graduating from a university in Australia, and the average salary of both these types of graduates, from 2004 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the percentage of graduates that got full-time jobs after graduating from a university in Australia, and the average salary of both these types of graduates, from 2004 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph displays the proportions of students who got full-time jobs after their graduation and the table shows their average income from the years 2004 to 2012.
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. the percentages of both
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graduates
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and other
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remained relatively stable over the period of time. The salary of both
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increased
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the
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time and
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graduates
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have a higher salary than others.
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began the period at nearly 80% in 2004 and grew slightly to approximately 85% in 2008 before its gradual decrease to nearly 80% which remained the same. Other students who graduated started the time at nearly 65% in 2004 and went up to approximately 85% in 2006 before their
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year on year
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until
they reached nearly 65% which their proportion remained stable. The income of the
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from
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41.000
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in 2004 which grew to 56.000
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in 2012. Other
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began at 41.000
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which was equal to
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graduates
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in 2004.
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, it gradually rose to 51.000
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in 2012 lower than those who graduated from
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words math, graduates, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduates
  • Full-time employment
  • Average salary
  • Fluctuating trend
  • Correlation
  • Coincide
  • Stagnated salaries
  • Sector influence
  • Cyclical economic factors
  • Employment percentages
  • Salary trends
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