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The line graph below displays the unemployment rates among university graduates in Australia, Canada, Germany, and Japan from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph below illustrates the percentages of unemployment among college graduates in
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Correct article usage
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 country between 1991-2005.
Overall
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, it's clear that the lowest rate was in the first year of
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 statistic. And Germany has scored it. At the same time, Spain started with the highest figure in 1991.
To begin
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 with, the university Australian graduates show that Italy was in the middle from 1991 to 2003. their beginning was 8% in 1991. and raised to 12% in 1999. but, they got a sudden down to the same number.
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, Spain has reached the greatest amount of unemployment in two periods.
Then
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, they decreased significantly to 9 per cent in the
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 year.
Lastly
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, It is a sudden for many people that Germany
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 only four per cent in 1991. with a long time to stay in the down rates compared with other countries.
Finally
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, they increased to 11 per cent in 2005.

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