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he bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country. European Health Expenditure as Percentage of Gross Domestic Product, 2002, 2007 and 2012

he bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country. European Health Expenditure as Percentage of Gross Domestic Product, 2002, 2007 and 2012
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The data illustrates the present health
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 as
proportion
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a proportion
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 of the
GDP
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 for some nations in Europe in the
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 2002, 2007 and 2012.
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, the expenditure for 2002 and 2007 has been the same for most of the countries
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 that of 2012 has been fluctuating. Some regions have had the same
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 for the 3
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 of study
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 as Belgium, Estonia,
Spain
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 and Switzerland. Switzerland had the highest gross domestic product in all the
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while
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 Estonia recorded the lowest in the study
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 compared to other nations. In 2012 Belgium, Norway and Denmark had the same amount of
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 at 10%,
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Spain
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 and Netherlands had the same
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 recording at 8%. Slovenia and France were close in expenditure at around 9%.
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 year 2007
Spain
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,Slovenia and
Luxembourghaving
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Luxembourg having
 recorded equal
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 at 8%
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 Lithuania and Estonia published the lowest proportion at around 5% and 3% respectively. In 2002 Belgium, France and Netherlands had 10%
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 of the total
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in contrast
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 to
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, Slovenia and Luxembourg which used 8%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, gdp, years, spain with synonyms.
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