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The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table and chart
provides
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 us
information
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with information
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 about the amount of
time
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 spent by UK people on household activities and free
time
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 activities in the year
of
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apply
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2008. When it comes to leisure activity,
Men
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spending
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spend
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 much more
time
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 than
woman
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women
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 on TV, video, and radio which
was
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 137
minutes
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 each day compared to
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women
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women's
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 only 118
minutes
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 per day. For reading ,
women
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 hold the highest times than
men
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, 19
minutes
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 and 18
minutes
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 respectively.
The
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In the
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 remaining
activities
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activity
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, which is Sport , we can see
men
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 required more
time
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 about 15
minutes
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 than
women
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 only 11
minutes
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 per day . As we can see
that
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, there are 4 main household
activites
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activities
 between
womn
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women
 and
men
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, cooking and washing, shopping, repair, clothes washing and ironing. so far, cooking and washing
the
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are the
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 most substantial duties at home with about 80 and 25
minutes
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 spent on them by
women
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 and
men
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.
for
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For
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 shopping,
men
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 had just below 40
minutes
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 and
women
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 spent slightly under 25
minutes
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 on them.
in addition
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, UK females
spending
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spend
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 about 30
minutes
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for
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on
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 clothes/washing/ironing and approximately 10
minutes
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by
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on
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men
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 on
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this
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these
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 duties. The
last
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 one,
repair
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the repair
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 was the lower
activitity
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activity
that
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apply
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spent
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was spent
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 by UK
citizen
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citizens
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, both females and
mens
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men
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 experienced
closely
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close
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10
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to 10
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minutes
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 and nearly 20
minutes
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 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, minutes, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparison
  • Household activities
  • Leisure activities
  • Average
  • Significantly more/less
  • Markedly more/less
  • Striking difference
  • Counterparts
  • Societal norms
  • Differing interests
  • Dedicated time
  • Household tasks
  • Maintenance
  • Repairs
  • Pursuits
  • Socializing
  • Gender divide
  • Traditional roles
  • Allocation of time
  • Reflects
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