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The line graph shows the number of video game discs that were bought in four months in 2014 from four different game stores, and the pie chart shows the percentage of games that had highest sales over this time

The line graph shows the number of video game discs that were bought in four months in 2014 from four different game stores, and the pie chart shows the percentage of games that had highest sales over this time
The line graph illustrates the
fiqures
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figures
 of Video Games
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and DVD
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DVD
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DVDs
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 that
were
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was
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 sold in different
stores
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 over
a
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apply
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4-months
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4-month
 in 2025.
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, it is noticeable there were
a
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general
up ward
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upward
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 trends in three
stores
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stores
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, Ctbereid
store
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 and ubuhanrd
sotore
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stores
.
on the other hand
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, the IGn was
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the
 only
store
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had
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that had
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 a
decreased
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decrease
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. In January, the sold
of
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off
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store
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the store
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 in
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the sreid
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sreid
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Sreid
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store
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 was almost 3000.
Whike
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While
 Game stop
sotre
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store
 was the second highest
solds
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sold
 after Ubihard. In February , both Gamestop and
cyberium
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Cyberium
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stores
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 had the same
amout
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amount
 of video games sold at approximately 2100 discs.
In contrast
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 , From February to April
moths
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months
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 the sales
when
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went
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 down by almost 30%
of
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for
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 all
cattegories
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categories
 except IGN with
nearly
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a nearly
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 10%
improve
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improvement
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. In
contrasit
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contrast
, IGN reached
the
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doubled
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double
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 in that given period.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words stores, store with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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