Some people think that workers like nurses, doctors and teachers do not get enough payment while film actors and athletes get more money than the importance of their job. How far do you agree or disagree?

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people
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that jobs like nurses, doctors and teachers do not get paid enough
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to famous film
actors
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and
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. I totally agree with
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statement for some reasons mentioned in
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essay.
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,
workers
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like nurses, doctors and teachers make a big difference in moving the nation.
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as, teachers being able to teach the next generation and doctors and nurses to help whoever
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need.
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, helping people
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is not easy being mentally ready
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to meet and help others. Having a limited number of vacation days is not good for the
workers
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and it is usually not enough.
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, they are the wheels of every
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country
, they are needed everywhere in the world. For that, they deserve a raise and
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easier times.
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,
actors
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and
athletes
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get paid way
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much money that
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believe they do not deserve. Sure they usually make a great way to connect with other people.
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, I talk about football
athletes
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to my brother all the time and famous
actors
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to my sister. But, they serve way little of an impact to be deserving of
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amount of money for just being famous. In conclusion,
workers
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with
most
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important jobs do not get paid
as well as
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actors
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and
athletes
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. the impact of some
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are
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to
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great for not giving it attention enough unlike
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others
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for just being more famous. I hope the government tries to fix what
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to be fixed.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your main idea in the introduction. This helps the reader understand your position better.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words (like 'firstly', 'secondly', 'finally') to make your essay flow better and show the connection between ideas.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples or details to support your main points. This will make your argument stronger.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion about the topic, which is important in your essay.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your essay is present, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • discrepancy
  • healthcare professionals
  • societal well-being
  • market-driven
  • compensation
  • underpaying
  • equitable
  • reflective
  • consequences
  • demand and popularity
  • societal contribution
  • essential workers
  • complexities
  • equitable compensation system
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