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The table below compares the use of water by four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. White at least 150 words Percentage of total water use by sector Country Domestic use industry Agriculture Egypt 8 10 62 Saudi Arabia 6 30 84 New Zealand 10 48 44 Canada 20 70 10

The table illustrates how four distinct countries consumed
water
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 for three purposes.
Overall
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, Egypt and Saudi Arabia allocated the majority of
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water
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their water
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 resources to agriculture
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while
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, while
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 New Zealand and Canada did so for industrial purposes. It was
also
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 evident that domestic
water
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 consumption remained relatively low among all countries. Regarding Egypt, just over four-fifths of
water
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 was
utilized
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utilised
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 agriculturally,
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 industrial and domestic consumption both stood at below 10%. A relatively similar pattern could be observed in Saudi Arabia, as agricultural usage constituted 64%, double the figure for industry, leaving domestic use with a mere 6%.
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, Canada distributed most of its
water
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 consumption, 70%, to industrial activities, which was more than triple the percentage for residential usage and seven times as high as that for agricultural purposes. Concerning New Zealand, industry and agriculture had relatively similar shares, at around 45% each, compared to 10% allotted to the domestic sector.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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