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The line graph shows the unemployment rates in three countries (the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan) between 1993 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the unemployment rates in three countries (the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan) between 1993 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph provides information about the
rates
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 of unemployed workers in three countries, including the
UK
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, the rest of Europe and
Japan
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 , between 1993 and 2007.
Overall
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,
while
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 unemployment
rates
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 in the United Kingdom and the rest of Europe experienced a decline,
Japan
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 saw an increase in the percentage of individuals. In 1993, the
UK
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 had the highest rate of idleness , with 11% of the population without work; year by year , it decreased. Interestingly, coming to 2001, the
rates
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 of the
UK
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 and
Japan
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 in the same level. In 2007, the percentage decreased to 5 per cent of
UK
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 unemployment.
Likewise
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, in Europe
also
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 the rate was
also
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 high at 9%,
then
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 it decreased sharply to 8%. The
last
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 indicator was 7%.
Japan
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 has the fewest number of people who are without work. In 1993, the rate of joblessness was 2% of the
overall
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 population of
Japan
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.
Moreover
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, in 2005, the
rates
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 of
Japan
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 and the
UK
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 intersected, reaching 5%. When it comes to 2007, the percentage indicated with 4% which was the greatest result in preventing lack of indolence.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, uk, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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