You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. Write a letter to the hotel, making the arrangements. In your letter tell them when you will be arriving and leaving explain what type of rooms you would like, and ask how much the weekend will cost ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I am reaching out to express my interest in staying at your hotel on Christmas Eve with my wife and offspring. As mentioned, we are going to travel with kids ;
thus
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, we need two rooms for seven days. It would be great if you could send the price chart, so I could make a decision
according to
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my budget.
Besides
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this
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, I saw an advertisement regarding the biggest fireworks show,which will be organised near the park from your hotel.
Also
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,we are planning to explore the city , which is one of the favourite attractions among people. If you suggest more things to explore, we will
also
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consider
it
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them
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. I hope that you will provide all the details as soon as possible so that I can make the reservation on time. Thank you for your consideration. Yours sincerely, Addi

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improvement
Add the leaving date and number of nights to show the full time you stay.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph and use small linking words like first, also, finally.
tone
Polite and formal tone.
content
You ask for price and things to do near the hotel.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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