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You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. Write a letter to the hotel, making the arrangements. In your letter tell them when you will be arriving and leaving explain what type of rooms you would like, and ask how much the weekend will cost ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter regarding room booking in your
hotel
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on
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apply
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this
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 weekend with my family. I saw your
hotel
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 advertisement in
local
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the local
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new paper
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newspaper
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 about new offers
, i
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. I
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 will come with my family
so
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, so
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that
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apply
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i
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I
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requried
Correct your spelling
require
 two
room
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rooms
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 with
large
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a large
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 space
and
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, and
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 we will stay in
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hotel
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the hotel
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 from 13 May to 16 May.
Moreover
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,
i
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I
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 would
grateful
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be grateful
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 if you could provide me
details
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with details
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 of all expenses to stay in
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hotel
Correct article usage
a hotel
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 on
weekend
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the weekend
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, with
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with
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including
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 all
service
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services
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, it will
helpful
Verb problem
be helpful
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 for me to manage my budget and my booking in advance
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also
Punctuation problem
, also
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depends
Wrong verb form
depending
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upon
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on
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 the cost of rooms.
Furthermore
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, I
also
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 want to get information regarding other tourist places and activities near your
hotel
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 so
me
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apply
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and my family
Correct word order
my family and
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can
Correct pronoun usage
I can
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easliy
Correct your spelling
easily
 visit
nearest
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the nearest
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attaractions
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attractions
. I am waiting for your response. Your faithfully, Jaz

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grammar
Fix spelling and cap the I and other names. 'new paper' should be 'newspaper'.
structure
Use a new paragraph for each idea to aid flow.
formality
Use 'Yours faithfully' as a formal closing.
clarity
Be clear on the dates and ask for the total cost in a simple way.
tone
Polite tone in the request.
content
The letter asks for key parts: dates, rooms, price, and places to visit near the hotel.
content
Two rooms and the weekend stay are clear.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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