The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.

The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.
The two bar charts illustrate the data of
chunk
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how many
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people watched reality and game shows
in
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by
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genders
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gender
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,
between
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across
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4 age ranges in Australia.
Overall
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, the largest rate of
who
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people who
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watch reality shows is
woman
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women
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. The ratio of who
watch
Correct subject-verb agreement
watches
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game shows is steadily different between
woman
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women
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and men.
Firstly
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, the rate of
who
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people who
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watch reality shows is

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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