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Most employers do job interviews before offering a position to a person. Do you think this is the best way to do it? What is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?

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recent years, the vast majority of work
institution
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institutions
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attend
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have attended
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 to interview the participant prior
hiring
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to hiring
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 a position. I totally believe that
this
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 tool of nomination
not
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is not
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accurate
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an accurate
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 method to measure the standards of
employee
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employees
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.
This
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 essay will explain and mention the
alternatives way
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alternative ways
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 to
matching
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the matching
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 process.
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 personal
interview
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interviews
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,
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apply
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consider
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as
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traditional tools in most common
sector
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sectors
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 to evaluate
participant
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participant'
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 social and personal
intelligent
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intelligence
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 addition to
identify
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identifying
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 their background in certain
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conditions
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such
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 as critical thinking, problem-solving , time management and dealing with
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stress without
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 exposure to their practical rules.
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, some occupation depends on
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physical and
hands on
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hands-on
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 ability which
interview
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an interview
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 can not sort it. For an instant , civil
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 staff should
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be fit
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fit physically
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physically fit
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maintain
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maintaining
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 the job
requirement
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requirements
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like
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optimal
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an optimal
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,
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 body index, mandatory body height
additional
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 to success
to
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high intensity
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,
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 physical training.
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, Human Resources should pay attention to the nature of job
requirement
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requirements
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 by applying smart checklists to assess the professional experiences
according to
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 oral and written test measure them academically.
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for
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example
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according to
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HR
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the HR
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 department in Saudi Arabia matching procedure
required
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requires
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 passing the Saudi
bord
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 exam
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, that
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that
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which
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present
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presents
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about 40% of matching
point
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points
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. In conclusion,
however
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 recruitment pathway is
combination
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a combination
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 of elements,
depend
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depending
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 on
company
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the company
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vision
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vision,
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 linked with academic performance
requirement
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requirements
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 that need clear investigation and intervention
more
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, more
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 than
personal
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a personal
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meeting
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meeting,
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 in order to
optimize
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optimise
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selection of the
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the selection of
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 candidates.

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language
Fix big grammar errors and use proper form. Use 'is/are' with the subject. Use 'the job' and clear plurals.
structure
Make a plan with one short intro, 2 body parts, and a short end. Keep one idea in each part.
content
Give clear examples that fit the job. Show how a test can show the skill. Tie each example to a job need.
vocabulary
Use easy words and avoid long words. This helps read and score.
coherence
Use link words like first, also, but, so, finally to guide the mind.
idea
The main idea that interviews may not show all skill is clear.
structure
There is a start and a close to the essay.
content
Some ideas are given with examples, such as tests for body work.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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