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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Both of the line graphs illustrate the source of New Zealand import figures for 10
years
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10-year
period
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, 1994 to 2004.The first line graph contains the amount of
imports
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 to New Zealand from
Australia
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,
while
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 the second shows
imports
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 from
Japan
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. The number of
imports
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fluctuate
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fluctuates
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 over the
period
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.
Overall
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,
imports
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 from
Australia
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 and
Japan
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 started with a slight gap in 1994,
then
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Australia
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 managed to widen the gap in 2004.
Imports
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 from
Australia
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 are higher by 1000 Million NZ$ than
Japan
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in
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at
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 the beginning of the
period
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. The numbers decreased to
its
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their
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 lowest dip in 1999 and
then
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 generally increased to
its
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their
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 peak at 8000 in 2004.
However
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, the case is different to
Japan
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.
Japan
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's
imports
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 amount started by increasing in the first three years and
then
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 decreased by 4000 Million NZ$ for the
last
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 seven years of the
period
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, imports, australia, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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