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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two line graphs give information about New Zealand’s import figures from Australia and
Japan
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 between 1994 and 2004. The data is presented in millions of
NZ dollars
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.
Overall
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, both graphs show fluctuating trends over the ten-year period. Imports from Australia began at a similar level to those from
Japan
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, but ended much higher.
In contrast
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, the value of imports from
Japan
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 fell noticeably by the end of the period. In 1994, New Zealand spent around 4,000
million
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NZ dollars
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 on goods imported from Australia.
This
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 figure increased steadily until it plunged to a low of 3,000
million
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 in 1999.
After
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this
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 point, it rose sharply, reaching over 7,000
million
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 between 2000 and 2001, before peaking at around 8,000
million
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 in 2004. Imports from
Japan
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 started at 3,000
million
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NZ dollars
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 in 1994 and grew gradually to just over 6,000
million
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 in 1997. The figure
then
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 fluctuated but remained relatively high, staying at around 6,000
million
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 in 2000.
However
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, after 2000, it plummeted to approximately 2,000
million
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 by 2004.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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