The line graphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.

A glance at the graph illustrates the

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produced of

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and the actual demand for

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, in today's article, we're going to address both the results of each

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and, actual demand.

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with, the graph depicts a high

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steel

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produced around 4000

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in early January , and it keeps rising until it reaches 5000

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before dropping back to 4000 and maintains its level until August. It drops back to 3000 before skyrocketing to 5000 in the same month. It

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plunges to around 1000

at the end

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of the year.

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depicts a shortage of

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production for the first time that year. At the outset, actual demand for

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maintained a rhythm from the start of 2010 throughout April, August in around 2000-3000

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tonnes

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before it plunged to 0 in early December and skyrocketed to 2000

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tonnes

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in the same month , surpassing the

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produced for the first time that year.

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