The line graphs below show the production of and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The provided line graphs illustrate the
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generation
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steel
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in
million
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tons
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and how many
employers
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employees
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work for
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the steel
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industry in the UK
of
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for
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full
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the full
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year
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.
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, what stands out from the graph is that there was
considerable
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fall
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in the production of
steel
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,
whereas
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the annual demand of
steel
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went up significantly
the
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period in question. Another interesting point is that production of
steel
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was the
most
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highest
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in
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January and August. Looking at the details, as regards
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the Amount
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produced,
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generation started at 4000
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tons
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January
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in January
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, it
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experienced
a sharp climb, which reach to the peak of 5000
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tons
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, after that
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, despite
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falling
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to 4000
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tonnes
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tons
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until April. Having remained stable at approximately 4000
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tonnes from April
till
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to
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August.Takings fluctuated at around 4800
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tons
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.
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the figure went down
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dramatically
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reached
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a
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trough
of almost 800
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tons
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until the end of
year
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.
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, the demand
of
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steel
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fluctutaed
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fluctuated
at
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in
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the first eight months of the
year
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.
in
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the
last
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four months of
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year
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the year
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, the figure saw a considerable fall
over
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to a trought at around 0
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tons
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,
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it recovered to reach 2000
million
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tonnes in December.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words steel, million, tons, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • surge
  • decline
  • plateau
  • rebound
  • demand
  • production
  • employment
  • industry
  • manufacturing
  • output
  • workforce
  • exceed
  • correspond
  • tonnes
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