The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,

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of students from one unvirsity from UK. Those
people
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spoke other
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in 2000 and 2010.
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, the highest
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number of students
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who
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were able to speak
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Spanish
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throughout the period.
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people
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only
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also
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others who spoke two
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were the same ,throughout the time. First of all, by 2000,
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were the greatest with 30%,
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people
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with no
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were lower with 20%.
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the same time, students with another
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also
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others with
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were
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with 15%.
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,
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who spoke
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German
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and others with two
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were the same
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10%. After
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years, four
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language
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had a similarity were
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people
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; people
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with
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, two
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and no other
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also
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german only were 10%.
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another
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was higher than
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years by 5%.
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Also
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Spanish only was greater than
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years with 5%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, languages, language with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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