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Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. af

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The
transportation's
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transportation
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 methods for individuals
travelled
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who travelled
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 to
single
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a single
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 university
for working
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to work
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 or
studying
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study
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 in 2004 and 2009 in the
united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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.
Overall
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,in 2004 the most popular
mothed
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mode
 was car and the second was
buses
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,
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;
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however
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, in 2009
this
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 was the oppisite and the
useage
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usage
 of
buses
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 was the highest and using
car
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cars
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 was the second. The
others
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other
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 three
motheds
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months
 increased slightly in 2009. In 2004 , the usage of cars was the th highest with nearly
the
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half of the
persentage
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percentage
, and
buses
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 was thw second
around
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, around
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 the third. The other three
motheds
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modes
 of transprorts walking, bicycals and
train
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train,
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 were around 4%,9%and 3% respectively . In 2009, the situation was the
oppisite
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opposite
 with cars and
buses
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 , and the
using
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use
 of
buses
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 was the
bigest
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biggest
 with under
the
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half , and the percentage of cars was just above
the
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a
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 fifth.
other
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The other
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 three
motheds
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modes
 increased
slitghly
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slightly
 with 16% for
bicycals
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bicycles
 and 6% ,4%respectively for walking and train .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words buses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • travel
  • transport
  • people
  • university
  • work
  • study
  • year
  • 2004
  • 2009
  • train
  • bicycle
  • bike
  • bus
  • walk
  • walking
  • car
  • share
  • part
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
  • change
  • trend
  • describe
  • compare
  • year by year
  • overall
  • which
  • more
  • less
  • most
  • least
  • reason
  • cause
  • cost
  • time
  • convenience
  • parking
  • cycle lane
  • policy
  • city
  • weather
  • therefore
  • however
  • also
  • but
  • and
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