One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friend. In your letter: 1. Say how well you know your friend. 2. Describe the qualifications and experience that your friend has. 3. Explain why your friend would be suitable for this job.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention information about my friend, Ali Hashem , who has applied as a sports trainer at the camp. We have built a strong friendship over five years ago, during
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years. He is one of my best friends
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his unique features, including kindness, support, and loyalty. As I know, he has a wide range of qualifications
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as safety certification,
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degree, and
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qualification. He
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has three years of experience
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working with younger people , which has enabled him to develop his professional skills, particularly effective communication skills. I strongly recommend him for
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job, as his experiences and professional skills can help him manage his responsibilities as a sports trainer more efficiently, particularly since he has to work with young people. Thank you for your consideration and time. Please feel free to contact me
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information about Ali. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil

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Say more about why Ali is right for a summer camp. For example, explain how he can lead games, keep children safe, and make them feel happy.
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Give one clear example of his work with young people. This will make your support more real and strong.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: how you know Ali, his skills, and why you support him. Use linking words such as “Also”, “For example”, and “As a result” to join ideas more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. The last paragraph can focus only on why he will do well at the camp.
coherence and cohesion
Change “Please feel free to contact me you want” to “Please feel free to contact me if you want further information.”
task response
You answer all three parts of the task: your friendship, Ali’s skills and work history, and why you recommend him.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and fit a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow because each paragraph has a clear main idea.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • ardent enthusiast
  • physical education
  • sportsmanship
  • pragmatic approach
  • diligence
  • team spirit
  • engaging personality
  • mentorship
  • leadership qualities
  • communication skills
  • first-aid certified
  • discipline
  • adaptability
  • youth mentor
  • enthusiastic
  • influential coach
  • role model
  • positive reinforcement
  • camaraderie
  • empathy
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