Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

In many companies, strategic level positions,
such
as directors, CFO’s and GM’s are occupied by
men despite
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men, despite
the fact that women hold more than 50 percent jobs in many developed nations. I don’t agree
to
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with
the suggestion of fixing a
quota
of these position based on
gender
to women only. The main reasons are lack of relevant skills for
such
jobs and encouragement of
gender
discrimination. It is true that the women hold more jobs than men in many developed nations,
however
it does not necessarily mean that they have the relevant skills for high level jobs. Many important job roles require, strategic and management skills which may not be possessed by
majority
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the majority
of women. Having more number of jobs simple does not imply that all women are holding management jobs. Fixing the
quota
or percentage for
such
roles
a principle or condition that customarily governs behavior
rules
may result in many positions being vacant due to lack of relevant skills.
For
example in
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example, in
Pakistan many women do not pursue accountancy qualifications, if the
quota
is fixed for high level accountancy roles
,
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,
there would be
shortage
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a shortage
of skill and the position would remain vacant.
Secondly
, fixing a
quota
will encourage
gender
discrimination as the selection may not happen on the merit basis.
This
would
demotivate
the employees of other
gender
i
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I
.e.
men
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Men
. If a percentage is fixed for women, there are high chances that a male applicant who is more
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
may not be selected and
this
may
also
result in un-employment of skilled people.
For example
, in a Sindh province of Pakistan, a
quota
is fixed in universities of Karachi for rural areas due to which many deserving students
of
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in
from
the urban areas don’t get the admission. In the conclusion, I would like to state that, fixing of
quota
for any type of job will definitely employ more women,
however
it may lead to inappropriate hiring of staff due to a lack of relevant skills,
further
more it may encourage
gender
discrimination and
also
cause
demotivation
in men to unemployment.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender diversity
  • Affirmative action
  • Meritocracy
  • Quotas
  • Glass ceiling
  • Legal enforcement
  • Tokenism
  • Voluntary measures
  • Career progression
  • Representation
  • Workforce parity
  • Backlash
  • Historical imbalances
  • Corporate governance
  • Inclusive practices
  • Boardroom dynamics
  • Gender norms
  • Unconscious bias
  • Regulatory frameworks
  • Corporate ladder
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