Many high-level positions in company are filled by men ,even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 60 per cent for women companies shoub be required to allocate a certain percentage if these positions for women. for what extened do you agree with that

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In several organisations, management levels are often given to males when women account for 60

percent

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per cent

of the manpower in

first

world countries. Due to the imbalance and prejudice in

this

, I disagree that a certain percentage should be allowed as one should be handed a position based on their merits and capabilities.

Firstly

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individuals capabilities should be

assesed

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assessed

based on their knowledge and

hardwork

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hard work

that is

contributed to the organisation and not their gender. If a females

puts

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put

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incomparable

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the

comparable effort towards a project and

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are

overlooked due to her sex, the unfairness in the system becomes obvious. Women are now empowered to think on the feet and be as

self sufficient

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self-sufficient

to their male counterparts.

Secondly

, with the progression of time

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many women have several roles to play. She could be tied down to looking after her family and juggling work at the same time.

However

this

does not affect her

drrive

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drive

and performance at work. The old school thought of women being in the kitchen should be eradicated from

this generations minds and roles

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the minds and roles of this generation

this generation's minds and roles

which were once dominated

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by men should be entrusted to women. In conclusion, I believe that giving a higher position should be in line with

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the

dedication that a person puts in towards their work and not based on their gender. With equality in the workforce, especially in developed nations, it will encourage women from around the world as they know they would be treated with the same fairness and equality that they deserve.

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